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My First Map Review: JPM

#1 User is offline   llehctim4 

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Posted 05 August 2012 - 03:59 PM

Welcome to my first map review in Halo Reach!



Map name: JPM

Creators: i ImpROBable, KSI Milk Man, mythikmayhem

Download link: http://halo.xbox.com...etails/28172357


I hope you enjoy it, please give me some feedback. More reviews will come soon.

This post has been edited by llehctim4: 06 August 2012 - 02:56 AM

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^CoookkieMonster said:

I can't even get a shout in edgewise, I love it
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Posted 05 August 2012 - 05:03 PM

Broski, wrong video.
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Posted 06 August 2012 - 02:57 AM

Lol, thanks. It's fixed now.
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I can't even get a shout in edgewise, I love it
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Posted 06 August 2012 - 05:38 AM

You have no flow to your commentary. You comment on random things on the track and use the word "also" way to many times. You are basically talking in a run on sentence. But you are here to improve and that you shall do.
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Posted 06 August 2012 - 07:39 AM

View PostThe Aviator13, on 06 August 2012 - 05:38 AM, said:

You have no flow to your commentary. You comment on random things on the track and use the word "also" way to many times. You are basically talking in a run on sentence. But you are here to improve and that you shall do.


Thanks for the feedback. I will try to improve on those things, and I didn't notice the "also" thing until you said, I think I used it 5 times in this short commentary, I'll try to vary my vocabulary a bit more next time...
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^CoookkieMonster said:

I can't even get a shout in edgewise, I love it
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Posted 15 March 2013 - 09:19 AM

View Postllehctim4, on 06 August 2012 - 07:39 AM, said:

Thanks for the feedback. I will try to improve on those things, and I didn't notice the "also" thing until you said, I think I used it 5 times in this short commentary, I'll try to vary my vocabulary a bit more next time...


Keep working on it mate, you'll get better and it wasn't to bad
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